Is corporate America killing our PR writers?

Mon, Apr 30, 2012

PR

Go ahead, re-read that press release you just wrote. I’m willing to bet I’m going to find one of the following phrases in it:

 

Leverage

Paradigm

Synergy

Do those sound like words we use in everyday conversations? No. Do they even sound like words you use in the workplace? Not really–from time to time maybe.

So, why do the folks of corporate American write like this? (Keep in mind, I’m not immune here–I’ve worked for plenty of organizations where I’ve written materials with these words and phrases included)

I’m not really sure. I think it’s a combination of corporate leaders wanting to portray a professional voice–and very risk-averse cultures.

But, the problem isn’t the “why”, it’s the “what do we do about it.”

Weren’t we taught to “write like we speak” back in high school and college? Why does that fly out the window when we start writing on a company’s behalf?

And think about the people we’re writing for: customers, media and other key “stakeholders” (see, I slipped right there!). Do those people use the kinds of words you’re using in your release or marketing materials? Do they talk like that?

Chances are, the answer is no.

But, why not ask them?

Here’s a radical idea. Next time you write a release–write two.

Write one in the typical corporate voice you would normally.

And, write the second in a more human voice. A more conversational voice. Write like you speak.

Then, post both to your corporate blog (if you have one) and ask your readers (hopefully a mix of customers, employees and shareholders) what they prefer. After all, isn’t the heart of writing to communicate effectively with your reader? You can’t do that if you’re using so many corporate buzzwords that the meaning of your messages is watered down or miscommunicated completely.

Gauntlet thrown down. Who’s up to the challenge?

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Trace_Cohen 19 pts

This is great. A press release is for the press, not your consumer! I just launched my new company Launch.it and introduced the concept of a PR Journalist, which is exactly what you're advocating. Write a story that you actually want to share and have people read, that is truthful, honest and not full of jargon. No one knows the product or service better than you, so don't rely on someone else to write the story.

asauertieg 5 pts

I love this as an assignment for my PR writing class!

Ken Schneider 5 pts

Here's a thought- press releases should be used to present information to THE PRESS. Why has it become the format used to convey information to stakeholders? 

arikhanson 71 pts moderator

 Ken Schneider OK, but same logic applies? Journalists don't write like robots, right?

Ken Schneider 5 pts

 arikhanson No, they do not. Clarity should be valued in any communication and cliche buzzwords such as "paradigm" and "synergy" are unlikely to be part of a compelling pitch.

laurelmackenzie 6 pts

Arik, 

 

Thank you for bringing this important conversation back to the forefront. I can't wait for the day of jargon-free releases with quotes no longer begin with "We're excited..."

 

Did you see SEOmoz's "memenouncement" today? (http://www.seomoz.org/dp/big-news-memeified) Certainly an outlier, but it speaks to your point of writing releases with a more human voice. Hopefully its attention will be a case-in-point that doing things differently can pan out, if you—and your client—are willing to take a chance. 

 

And yes, I am up for the challenge. 

 

Laurel Miltner

 laurelmackenzie 

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ali_rene
ali_rene @ali_rene 30 Apr

@OffThe_Record @arikhanson most definitely!!

OffThe_Record
OffThe_Record @OffThe_Record 30 Apr

@arikhanson But I'm up for your challenge though. I'm all in on the next news release.

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